Light through my window

(When I met Melanie from TWT and other teachers in our Thursday writing group for the first time in January, she provided a mentor text to inspire our writing and asked us to choose a setting and describe it in detail. I recently found that paragraph, hand-written in my notebook. What a welcome surprise to find it and read it again. A reminder that stumbling upon the TWT blog and making a commitment to reignite my writing practice in community with other teachers was one of the best decisions I have made in a long time. Here’s that first slice.)

The late evening sunbeams flooded the dining room, creating rainbow reflections on the wall as light danced through the crystals that hung from the chandelier. She looked up from the computer screen to catch a shadow, projected across the ceiling. The light reminded her of warmer times — outside, but also inside. When connections were stronger and she didn’t feel that she needed to make excuses about why she wanted to stay at home. Winter cold lingering, the bitterness of the wind, the cascade of snow — they were all a perfect alibi for being alone, staying inside and creating the distance needed to exist without explanation. She welcomed the light. The warmth touched her pale cheeks like a fleeting lover’s kiss. She liked how it felt, but then it was gone. The red ball in the sky met the skyscrapers’ upper limit and slowly diminished, sinking secretly in the face of the encroaching darkness that quickly devoured the light.

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  1. Amy Crehore Avatar

    I love when we encounter a piece of writing and can see it with fresh eyes. What’s even cooler is that you wrote this in third person. A beautiful, simple moment, with many layers.

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  2. Anita Ferreri Avatar

    Giovanna, Did you start with the description or the paragraph??? It really doesn’t matter as they merge into one late winter evening when we all gathered, some of us wondering what we were doing there and others wondering why we would even consider such a writing challenge. I am so glad you are here. Your create pictures with words that amaze me.

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    1. Giovanna Panzera (awritingjourney) Avatar

      Thank you, Anita, for that support. I felt it on day one and it’s only become stronger. So glad that you are part of this community!

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  3. lvahey Avatar

    What a post! “The warmth touched her pale cheeks like a fleeting lover’s kiss. She liked how it felt, but then it was gone.” – These lines have me wrapped around your fingers, right in this sunset with you, feeling all the feelings, the colors, the movement. Just lovely!

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